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There's love and then there's LOVE
trust and then TRUST.
The difference in between
is a matter
of lust.
Bits of Jealous.

I can hold her hands,
but I can't hold her world.
Like Maroon 5
left with songs about the girl.
A pile of poems
to keep me warm
within papercuts to the heart
when I curl, into a ball of a man
spinning out of control. Words flying to the east,
stanzas spinning out of sight,
mass production of terror,
love, dark and light.

If I had one wish
I don't know what I'd do,
if I was told that in wishing
I still couldn't have you,
but that's the way it is
fiction or fact.
These emotions are lasting
with no getting over that.
So i'll write my prayers
while holding my breath.
Better to suffocate if I can't be
with my muse,
then go on in this living death.
Never did get the girl. First and last love. First and last broken heart. From a few years back.
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Mez3rika Featured By Owner Edited Sep 10, 2014  Hobbyist
The first stanza has that drop of amazing rhyme. You know, like a dropbeat--except poetic. :giggle:
Though keep in mind that...

There is you and then there is YOU
me and then ME.
What is in between
is a matter of
we.


:heart:
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HamsterScribbles Featured By Owner Sep 10, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
O___O when I read that last part I thought you were quoting from the poem only to realize you mirrored the style to make something beautiful of your own, and meaningful to me. I love you so much.
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Mez3rika Featured By Owner Sep 10, 2014  Hobbyist
I love you more. :heart:
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FezzyTavers Featured By Owner Jun 14, 2014
This poem speaks truth. It is one thing to hear about the idea, but another to experience the thing for yourself. One thing to be told about trust, another to leave a matter in the hands of another, etc.
You get my golden seal of approval (read: another fave.).
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EvanescentOceans Featured By Owner Jun 14, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
Oh poor you... 
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HamsterScribbles Featured By Owner Jun 14, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
sarcasm or honesty, I'll take either hehe :)
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EvanescentOceans Featured By Owner Jun 14, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
Honestly, I know these feelings...
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HamsterScribbles Featured By Owner Jun 14, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
:huggle:
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Streiben Featured By Owner Jun 14, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
Sad, but yet wonderful in it own hurtful way...
<3
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DarkDeviousAngel Featured By Owner Jun 13, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
Wow! 

That is some VERY intense writing there. I can almost feel the suffocation you are enduring, feel the yearning and the heart ache felt from losing one's muse.  

And I know the feeling all too well. 

Very well written. Thank you for sharing this with us.
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