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There's love and then there's LOVE
trust and then TRUST.
The difference in between
is a matter
of lust.
Bits of Jealous.

I can hold her hands,
but I can't hold her world.
Like Maroon 5
left with songs about the girl.
A pile of poems
to keep me warm
within papercuts to the heart
when I curl, into a ball of a man
spinning out of control. Words flying to the east,
stanzas spinning out of sight,
mass production of terror,
love, dark and light.

If I had one wish
I don't know what I'd do,
if I was told that in wishing
I still couldn't have you,
but that's the way it is
fiction or fact.
These emotions are lasting
with no getting over that.
So i'll write my prayers
while holding my breath.
Better to suffocate if I can't be
with my muse,
then go on in this living death.
Never did get the girl. First and last love. First and last broken heart. From a few years back.
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Mez3rika Featured By Owner Edited Sep 10, 2014  Hobbyist
The first stanza has that drop of amazing rhyme. You know, like a dropbeat--except poetic. :giggle:
Though keep in mind that...

There is you and then there is YOU
me and then ME.
What is in between
is a matter of
we.


:heart:
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HamsterScribbles Featured By Owner Sep 10, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
O___O when I read that last part I thought you were quoting from the poem only to realize you mirrored the style to make something beautiful of your own, and meaningful to me. I love you so much.
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Mez3rika Featured By Owner Sep 10, 2014  Hobbyist
I love you more. :heart:
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FezzyTavers Featured By Owner Jun 14, 2014
This poem speaks truth. It is one thing to hear about the idea, but another to experience the thing for yourself. One thing to be told about trust, another to leave a matter in the hands of another, etc.
You get my golden seal of approval (read: another fave.).
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EvanescentOceans Featured By Owner Jun 14, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
Oh poor you... 
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HamsterScribbles Featured By Owner Jun 14, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
sarcasm or honesty, I'll take either hehe :)
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EvanescentOceans Featured By Owner Jun 14, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
Honestly, I know these feelings...
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HamsterScribbles Featured By Owner Jun 14, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
:huggle:
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Streiben Featured By Owner Jun 14, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
Sad, but yet wonderful in it own hurtful way...
<3
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DarkDeviousAngel Featured By Owner Jun 13, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
Wow! 

That is some VERY intense writing there. I can almost feel the suffocation you are enduring, feel the yearning and the heart ache felt from losing one's muse.  

And I know the feeling all too well. 

Very well written. Thank you for sharing this with us.
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copper9lives Featured By Owner Jun 13, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
I send you love strong enough
To crack the world open
And let in the light.
Keep your palm open to receive
It will come.
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DerpyMabelPhinabella Featured By Owner Jun 13, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
A aww!
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PedroMessias Featured By Owner Jun 13, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
Ah love, makes us such a mess and wounds
But we do not stop writing about how good he is
Even without having
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SienaStarlyn Featured By Owner Jun 13, 2014  Student General Artist
ima girl and too young to date, but, how did you write this so well? its amazing! 
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HamsterScribbles Featured By Owner Jun 13, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
Lol, and it comes from experiancing real emotion, reading/writing enough to know how to translate it into words, and taking poetry classes in college to learn formatting, style, and keys to experimenting with poetry.
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SienaStarlyn Featured By Owner Jun 13, 2014  Student General Artist
no wonder. im only 7th grade. i dont take college. XD
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fennecfoxlily14 Featured By Owner Jun 13, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
Oh....Waaaah! 
But the only way to feel again is to let love in. You should listen to that song. "Let Love In" by the Goo Goo Dolls. I completely agree with you, though.
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HamsterScribbles Featured By Owner Jun 13, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
Had a few girlfriends since, just haven't fallen in love. Love Goo Goo Dolls.
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fennecfoxlily14 Featured By Owner Jun 13, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
Same. I had a terrible rough break-up and post-break-up with someone I keep in my life to this day. And I can't fall in love with real people. Anime guys? There's only one for me. But real people? It makes me uncomfortable to think about dating and falling in love. It just hurts where he used to be. And I can't let him go out of my life. I think someday things'll get a bit easier, but they'll never be the same.
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HamsterScribbles Featured By Owner Jun 13, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
Sadly, to move on I did have to let her go. It was so hard and took almost two years but I had never felt better. 
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fennecfoxlily14 Featured By Owner Jun 13, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
I've kept him in my life for three years now? I just want to see him happy. I drove past his old house and cried so hard. It hurt so bad. But I've fallen in love with an anime guy. I draw him a lot. Basil? Blonde hair and blue eyes. He's the safest thing for me. I don't wanna try again, though.
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HamsterScribbles Featured By Owner Jun 13, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
Ah. Who ended the relationship if you don't mind my asking? In my case.. I was the one who kept being left behind for someguy better looking. Always a different guy and always with the apologies to me and how much better I am and was.. but she never stayed.
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fennecfoxlily14 Featured By Owner Jun 14, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
Ah, he did. Over the phone. 5 days after my birthday. And for months, he'd call up, threatening to kill himself, and I had to force him to live. After something like that, how am I supposed to hop right back on the Love Train?
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